Anti-Bulling advert draft one:

Feedback on draft one: 
After uploading the first draft of my advert, i was given feedback in order to improve the video for its second draft. I was told that the script was excellent, along with the use of cross cutting.

In terms of improving the advert, I was told to reshoot both of the main shoots of the interviews. Mainly because the first one featuring me needed to be better framed to show the top of my head. While the second clip needs to be reshot because it was clear that Lewis (the actor featured in this scene) looks like his reading the lines from the script while in front of the camera. In order to improve this mistake i will be reshooting the clips featuring me. But also i will be filming using more people; in which the advert will feature each line of the script said by a different person on screen. To show of more of the point of how a lot of teenagers are cyber bullied.

Finally the last improvement i was asked to make was to change the music. I will need to keep the dark gloomy music at the start of the advert, but when the people featured in the advert start giving advise to fight online bullying. The music will become more upbeat and happy. So now the main goal is to find suitable music that isn't too upbeat compared to the music track this will follow on from.